1 Mayıs 2014 Perşembe

1. ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY---FIRST DARFT----ESRA UZEL

Should the Parents of Students Who Misbehave in School Be Required to Do Unpaid Work for Their Children School?

     Although some people think that parents should be responsible for doing unpaid work at the school where their children misbehave, it does not make sense when the children’s behaviors handle. Indeed, parents of course should be responsible for their children’s behaviors, but not like that. If parents become responsible for their children’ every misbehavior, then how will children learn the right from their faults. Instead of unpaid work, parents should pay the provision of damage which their children did, should search why their children behave like that and give them punishment not to repeat the same fault and also parents should courage their children to correct their faults as best they can.
     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parents should only pay the provision of damage which their children did unlike unpaid work. Every child makes mistakes in his/ her school time. Not only children but parents also have responsibility for children’s faults. Some schools demand parents doing unpaid work for their schools because of their children’s bad behavior. Indeed, this demand may make sense when children make mistakes unwillingly and give harm school equipment. For example, children may break the school’s window while they are playing with a ball. However, this demand does not make sense when children have psychological problems in their mind.
     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parent should search why their children behave like that and give them punishment not to repeat the same mistake unlike unpaid work. Children sometimes behave badly and intentionally, but sometimes make mistakes unwillingly. In a situation like that, parents should know what the underlying reasons for children’s behavior are and if behavior is made intentionally, then it should be given punishment to decrease frequency of bad behavior.
     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parent should courage their children to correct their faults as best they can unlike unpaid work. Some people think that parents should do unpaid work in exchange of their children’s bad behavior at school. Indeed, it can be valid for bad behaviors which damage school equipment. However, this idea cannot be valid when children behave like that due to a reason. In a situation like that, parents should give an opportunity to their children to correct their faults, so children learn the true thing from their faults and avoid making the same mistake next time.

     In sum, it does not make sense for parents only doing unpaid work in exchange for their children’s misbehaviors if they want their children to learn good behavior.  Parents should pay the provision of damage which their children did, should search the underlying reasons of their children’s bad behavior and give them punishment not to repeat the same fault and also parents should courage their children to correct their faults. Inasmuch as parents give opportunity to their children to take a lesson from their mistakes, children grow by supervising others’ right and become moral individuals.

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  1. 1)... their children’ every misbehavior => There is something missing.(5.line)

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  2. Your introduction should be better. You need to introduce some general information first.

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