2. ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY--SECOND DRAFT--ESRA UZEL--09.05.2014

                           IS COMPETITION GOOD FOR CHILDREN?

    Competition is defined as a contest for some prize, honor or advantage. Competition comes out when teachers want to motivate students. Also, parents create a competitive environment for their children by comparing them with others. Even though the perception of competition makes children motivate in the short-term, it has many harmful effects on children in the long-term. Because a competition which is seen as a good thing prevents personal development, creates a feeling of insignificance and makes life difficult, it should not be used neither by parents nor by teachers.

    Firstly, because competition prevents children’s personal developments, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. According to one research on children, children are presented games with different degrees of difficulty and they are wanted to choose one of them which they want. Most of the children choose games which are one or two upper units in terms of difficulty level of their skill. As you can see, a child can determine his/her development standard. However, when a child is involved in a competition, this development standard is determined by the most hardworking students, so a child is taken with a feeling of despair.

    Secondly, because competition creates a sense of insignificance, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. Since the value of a child is determined according to his/her success and other children in a competitive environment, it makes a child have a feeling of insignificance. Nevertheless, the value of a child should be determined considering his/her own values and identity. In a competitive environment, while the same children always become successful, the others always feel insignificant. As a result of this, children who are always successful become stressful to keep their statue.

    Finally, because competition makes life difficult to live, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. Any child who is a competitive environment sees the others as a rival, so she/he has a difficulty to build trust based relationship and perceives life as an unreliable environment. Because a child gives attention to what she/he will gain, she/ he cannot learn the things which benefit for the future. A child cannot live life freely for fear of losing the success or with effort of capturing success in a competitive environment. Because a child wants to be remembered with his/her success due to a competition, this child cannot spare time for social activities.

    In sum, a competition which is preferred to enhance success among children is not a good thing and it should not be used. As I mentioned above, competition prevents children’s personal development, engenders a sense of insignificance in children and makes life difficult for them. Therefore, ıf parents and teachers want children to be accomplished and prosperous, they should apply to competition. However, ıf they want children to be happy and also successful, they should not compare them with others. They should accept them as they are.

2. argumentative essay-first draft ESRA UZEL

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                            ESRA UZEL

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY 2

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               07.05.2014

                          

                      IS COMPETITION GOOD FOR CHILDREN?

    Competition is defined as a contest for some prize, honor or advantage. Competition comes out when teachers want to motivate students. Also, parents create a competitive environment for their children by comparing them with others. Even though the perception of competition makes children motivate in the short-term, it has many harmful effects on children in the long-term. A competition which is seen as a good thing prevents personal development, creates a feeling of insignificance and makes life difficult.

    Firstly, because competition prevents children’s personal developments, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. According to one research on children, children are presented games with different degree of difficulty and they are wanted to choose one of them which they want. Most of the children choose games which are one or two upper units in terms of difficulty level of their skill. As you can see, a child can determine his/her development standard. However, when a child is involved in a competition, this development standard is determined by the most hardworking students, so a child is taken with a feeling of despair.

    Secondly, because competition creates a sense of insignificance, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. Since the value of a child is determined according to his/her success and other children in a competitive environment, it makes a child have a feeling of insignificance. Nevertheless, the value of a child should be determined considering his/her own values and identity. In a competitive environment, while the same children always become successful, the others always feel insignificant. As a result of this, children who are always successful become stressful to keep their statue.

    Finally, because competition makes life difficult to live, it is not good and it should not be used to enhance success. Any child who is a competitive environment sees the others as a rival, so she/he has a difficulty to build trust based relationship and perceives life as an unreliable environment. Because a child gives attention to what she/he will gain, she/ he cannot learn the things which benefit for the future. A child cannot live life freely for fear of losing the success or with effort of capturing success in a competitive environment. Because a child wants to be remembered with his/her success due to a competition, this child cannot spare time for social activities.

    In sum, a competition which is preferred to enhance success among children is not a good thing and it should not be used. As I mentioned above, competition prevents children’s personal development, engenders a sense of insignificance in children and makes life difficult for them. Therefore, ıf parents and teachers want children to be accomplished and prosperous, they should apply to competition. However, ıf they want children to be happy and also successful, they should not compare them with others. They should accept them as they are.

1. ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY---FIRST DARFT----ESRA UZEL

Should the Parents of Students Who Misbehave in School Be Required to Do Unpaid Work for Their Children School?

     Although some people think that parents should be responsible for doing unpaid work at the school where their children misbehave, it does not make sense when the children’s behaviors handle. Indeed, parents of course should be responsible for their children’s behaviors, but not like that. If parents become responsible for their children’ every misbehavior, then how will children learn the right from their faults. Instead of unpaid work, parents should pay the provision of damage which their children did, should search why their children behave like that and give them punishment not to repeat the same fault and also parents should courage their children to correct their faults as best they can.

     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parents should only pay the provision of damage which their children did unlike unpaid work. Every child makes mistakes in his/ her school time. Not only children but parents also have responsibility for children’s faults. Some schools demand parents doing unpaid work for their schools because of their children’s bad behavior. Indeed, this demand may make sense when children make mistakes unwillingly and give harm school equipment. For example, children may break the school’s window while they are playing with a ball. However, this demand does not make sense when children have psychological problems in their mind.

     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parent should search why their children behave like that and give them punishment not to repeat the same mistake unlike unpaid work. Children sometimes behave badly and intentionally, but sometimes make mistakes unwillingly. In a situation like that, parents should know what the underlying reasons for children’s behavior are and if behavior is made intentionally, then it should be given punishment to decrease frequency of bad behavior.

     Because it is not true to load all bad results which are resulted in by children’s behaviors to parents, parent should courage their children to correct their faults as best they can unlike unpaid work. Some people think that parents should do unpaid work in exchange of their children’s bad behavior at school. Indeed, it can be valid for bad behaviors which damage school equipment. However, this idea cannot be valid when children behave like that due to a reason. In a situation like that, parents should give an opportunity to their children to correct their faults, so children learn the true thing from their faults and avoid making the same mistake next time.

     In sum, it does not make sense for parents only doing unpaid work in exchange for their children’s misbehaviors if they want their children to learn good behavior.  Parents should pay the provision of damage which their children did, should search the underlying reasons of their children’s bad behavior and give them punishment not to repeat the same fault and also parents should courage their children to correct their faults. Inasmuch as parents give opportunity to their children to take a lesson from their mistakes, children grow by supervising others’ right and become moral individuals.